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Friday, January 27, 2012

The Next Step




I strip the trials and pain away,
Tomorrow starts a brand new day
Of searching for a way to start
To mend my aching, shattered heart.

To keep my spirit from decay,
I strip the trials and pain away.
I’ve tried but just can’t be consoled.
How many tears can one heart hold?

How can I be brave, be strong?
I’m tired of singing that sad song.
I strip the trials and pain away,
Abandoning the old cliché.

If I can make it through this night,
I may just find the will to fight.
For strength to carry on, I pray.
I strip the trials and pain away.

12 comments:

Mary said...

I like this. YOu have really mastered the form.

booguloo said...

I like what you've done. Great write.

nan said...

The form supports the idea of the progression pf work, digging deeper and deeper (into the work/into the poem), taking off the layers of "wall paper"... stripping the trials and pain away. Well done.

Grace said...

Nice poetry form...the line of stripping the pain away was effective ~

Sherry Blue Sky said...

You have written this in perfect form. The lilt and meter are spot-on, it progresses wonderfully and the repetition really works to underline the message.

PhotoDiction said...

the form is wonderful, the sentiment even more so. a wonderful read.

Laura Maria said...

The repetition is so effective. I love the first half of the second verse.

Adura Ojo said...

Well penned write in form. I have recently started experimenting with writing strictly to form myself. I make up strict forms of my own as well. It can be quite a challenge writing to form particularly in trying to maintain one's individual writing style. Great job.

the wild magnolia said...

how we deal, with life.

good form.

great job.

Karen said...

Beautifully written.

S.E. Ingraham said...

As others have said before me but it bears repeating - you really honour the form well here; this is beautifully written

Judy Roney said...

This is beautiful. A plaintive cry heard loud and clear as I read. I think everyone has been there.