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Friday, February 24, 2012

The Next Verse



Again a verse for the sake of you,
One more addition to the tired song
You strum across my heartstrings,
A lilting melody of hope
That always descends into despair.
I know there are new songs to compose,
New notes to fill the aching emptiness,
But you have always been the tune
That I just can’t get out of my head.


Note: The prompt from Imaginary Gardens with Real Toads that helped shape this poem asked us to use the first line of a favorite poem as a jumping off point for writing our own poem.  I found my inspiration in Ashes of Soldiers by Walt Whitman.  Be sure to check it out as well, his poem was vastly different than mine!

12 comments:

Kateri said...

I know that feeling. Very well put.

Dave King said...

Impressive. You nimbly avoid all the usual traps.

Mary Ann Potter said...

Those pesky heartstrings. I'm sure we all know about that! Beautifully written. So glad you took this direction from that memorable first line.

Mary said...

Some verses keep repeating in their old forms, even if one wishes for new endings! Your poem made that point well, Mary.

Carrie Burtt said...

I love what you did with this.....beautiful and heartfelt.....love can be so painful.....and you captured those feelings in such a unique and creative way!

Daydreamertoo said...

Aww...the ache of deep love we never can quite be rid of.
Lovely imagery here.

Herotomost said...

Anything that mixes music with poetry is the bees knees in my book. Throw in the pic of the guitar, and you are singing my tune. And the cherry on top is Walt Whitman...one of my all time faves. Great writing and a great take on the challenge.

Kay L. Davies said...

Beautiful, Mary. I especially love the last two lines. Emotion is entwined in both music and poetry, and you have wound them all up together in a few well-chosen words.
K

Lolamouse said...

A lovely tribute to a loved one.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Oh this is poignantly beautiful."You have always been the tune....." lovely.

kaykuala said...

Love with all that it endures. It's painful at times. You wound it so beautifully with the music!

Hank

Ella said...

Beautiful...so memorable! What a tune you portrayed! Wonderful :D