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Sunday, April 8, 2012

Unfinished

Sorrow...by sweet-lovely-death at deviantART


His promises cannot redeem
The dusky shadows of a dream,
A mate who finds truth obsolete.
Her story is not yet complete.

Overwhelming feelings flood,
Addiction buried in her blood
That reawakens when they meet.
Her story is not yet complete.

She dies a bit with every kiss,
Staggering into the abyss
While destiny makes its retreat.
Her story is not yet complete.

Nothing but a wounded sparrow,
Lies have cut her to the marrow.
Deserving much more than deceit,
Her story is not yet complete.

Singing broken songs of sorrows,
Focusing on her tomorrows,
An ending she will not repeat,
Her story is not yet complete.


10 comments:

Heaven said...

The like the repeating line..her story is not yet complete. I can see her broken wings...and I hope she finds her path to happiness. Nice challenging form...well done ~

Mark Windham said...

excellent us of the words combined with strict use of form and a powerful piece. Love the pic too.

Marian said...

oh this poem stresses me out! run, girl, run!

Daydreamertoo said...

Very powerful indeed. I hope she has the sense to stay away. Even if she loves the man, he is poisoning and, killing her.
Great, atmospheric write and use of the prompt!

Mary said...

I am very impressed with how many prompts you used to accomplish this poem! Whew.

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Wonderful poem and companion photo!

Kerry O'Connor said...

You combined your prompts very skillfully in this poem. The repetition of the kyrielle lends itself to the idea of addiction.

Mystic_Mom said...

This is simply amazing!

Jules said...

Ah, a new form 'Kyrielle' ...
Hope you do not mind this inspired verse:

Healing wings for a safe flight
Escape wished in the grace of night
Allowing for complete retreat
Her story is not yet complete...
(JP/davh)

Sara McNulty said...

Mary, you may possibly be as dark leaning as me. I love this poem and how everything flowed so well.
I also love the line at the end of each stanza.