He plays at seduction like the moon,
His affections wax and wane.
The singer of a deceptive tune,
He plays at seduction like the moon.
When that troubadour starts to croon
The liar’s sweet refrain,
He plays at seduction like the moon,
His affections wax and wane.
15 comments:
the liars sweet refrain....nice line that...and def builds the character sketch well...nicely done...
Lyrical triolets with a touch of narrative are among the most natural of ideas in the triolet. This one balances both quite neatly.
The best triolets show a subtle narrative within the lyrical bounds. This one balances the two quite well.
This way lies madness for the maid who follows the man behaving like a lune or is that loon or buffoon? I'm sure it doesn't matter. What does is the capture here by moonlight of the infamous lethario!
This guy's appeared in a couple of villanelles over at my place.
Love the narrative, love how much is suggested by so little, love the rhythm and musicality of this.
Wow, well done~ I love how lyrical yours is~ Just beautiful!
Very nicely done. I enjoyed how it sounded read aloud.
A very good combination. Great!
Hank
I too love how musically lyrical this is Mary - very nice us of the form and I'm a sucker for anything to do with Luna (great photo as well!)
http://thepoet-tree-house.blogspot.com/2012/03/grief-leaves-heart.html
Ah yes, some liars can be VERY seductive indeed.
A beautiful triolet.....so lyrical.
ah those troubadours with the liar’s sweet refrain... when they start singing and playing their song...we all know their true nature...but who could resist...smiles
I like the rhythm of this ~ back and forth like the tides...
Oh Mary! I love this! Great comparison to the moon, and the waxing and waning affections.
What a cool Triolet! Fits perfectly.
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