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Sunday, July 1, 2012

In Her Eyes

hurt by Rubashka @ deviantART


Her inner world reflects in mood ring eyes,
Dark swirling spirals of broken dreams and lost youth.
The rose is trimmed back to the frozen ground.
Both will bloom again with the new season.



~~~~This poem was written in response to a prompt from Imaginary Garden with Real Toads, which asked us to use the Chinese form the Koan.  More information can be found on this form by following the link.

7 comments:

Mary said...

Well done, Mary! That fourth line really draws the three other lines together well!

Heaven said...

Yes, both will bloom again with the new season ~ Nice koan poem ~

Kerry O'Connor said...

Your metaphor of the rose is absolutely perfect as the third line of this koan.

Ella said...

I love what you have done! Your third line really distracts and the fourth unifies it all, so beautifully!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Absolutely wonderful!!!!!!! Ending with hope, which lifts the heart and gives promise of healing after pain. I love this koan so much!

Marian said...

it does seem counter-intuitive to trim them back in fall. to me, anyway. this is very nice.

Mama Zen said...

Perfect koan! Really beautiful work.